Commentary on Chris's paper

To start off this commentary I read Chris's paper. He wrote about legalizing marijuana. His paper was done very well, he had a lot of information and a lot of support to back up his claims. He did a great paper but he did not propose anything besides saying it should be legalized. There were a few spelling errors but nothing terrible (just reread the paper and you'll spot them), your paragraph structure was very good. If a skeptic were to read your paper he/she would have a hard time finding a bad thing or argument to against your topic. I suggest you add something about Prohibition from the 20's and how it fail to stay and why marijuana is connected to it (you already listed reasons why alcohol is worse than marijuana). I would also suggest you bring up any past laws that have been appealed since marijuana has been made illegal. Add a few statistics about cost (any and all though you did some already). The big and only real issue I had with your paper was there was no proposal and the structure was different than the "suggested" one. Thats it and good luck, granted you don't need it since you wrote a great paper to begin with.