Final Reflection (forgot on final paper)

Reflection

            To compare my original proposal paper draft to final draft it would be night and day. The first draft was under 1000 words. I had a very weak proposal and one that was unconstitutional which professor Brown did comment on. So I thought of a much better Proposal, one that was possible and allowed a lot of room to work with. I also included actual quotes and a citation page as well. I also took the advice from my partner on a few thing (like actually writing a paper instead of rushing last minute). I also took my own advice from my advice to my partner and followed the actual proposal prompt. I had forgotten it before and it made my paper much worse. I also changed the final part of my paper because it did not match my new overall paper. To basically conclude, I wrote a whole new paper. I built it up from scratch and made sure it the basic prompt.

Commentary on Chris's paper

To start off this commentary I read Chris's paper. He wrote about legalizing marijuana. His paper was done very well, he had a lot of information and a lot of support to back up his claims. He did a great paper but he did not propose anything besides saying it should be legalized. There were a few spelling errors but nothing terrible (just reread the paper and you'll spot them), your paragraph structure was very good. If a skeptic were to read your paper he/she would have a hard time finding a bad thing or argument to against your topic. I suggest you add something about Prohibition from the 20's and how it fail to stay and why marijuana is connected to it (you already listed reasons why alcohol is worse than marijuana). I would also suggest you bring up any past laws that have been appealed since marijuana has been made illegal. Add a few statistics about cost (any and all though you did some already). The big and only real issue I had with your paper was there was no proposal and the structure was different than the "suggested" one. Thats it and good luck, granted you don't need it since you wrote a great paper to begin with. 

Reflection of essay #3

First I changed the basic overall paper from a proposal to an actual ethical argument. Simply I confused the two because of what we were going over in class and followed the wrong guidelines. I then added actual ethical issues like childhood obesity and tried to explain how it is unethical. I also got a few different quotes to explain how childhood obesity is unethical and growing  "Between 2010 and 2020, new cases of Type 2 diabetes could increase tenfold; so could stroke, coronary heart disease, hypertension and arthritis. The number of cases could double again by 2030..." (Begley). This was one example of how I did this. I also expanded my original claim to include the cost of obesity as causing childhood obesity, the high cost of medical bills and possibility the cost of your own life. The only real thing besides rewriting my paper was displaying the problems of obesity instead of fixing it.
 

Man that slap to my face was harsh

1. Is the act of "doing nothing" worthless?
2. Is worth really how you benefit people (I.E. a job or some kind of skill)?
3. If people practice misery and still have a life, is that actually happiness?

I'll be writing about number two. First lets read more articles like that one. This article is something that actually is useful to real life and not just BS academia (which I love but can be too much sometimes). Worth is what you have for society? No. worth is what you make of your self and then you allow yourself to be used or give freely of your worth. Many people are productive members of society but have no real worth, they just exist in society. I know that sounds odd but people sometimes seem like one thing but are actually another. Like me, I am good at my job but hate it. To me I believe that i have no worth (this is purely in just my job and how i perceive myself to my company). They could easily replace my self but why would they? I have experience, i know my job and the customers who come back everyday. If i was the company i would simply fire me and hire someone with a little experience in retail, pay them way less and just continue the process till they get their benefit from the whole process. I'm basically rambling here since worth and benefiting people or yourself are intrinsically infinite. Basically worth to other people will always be different people and that goes hand in hand with the benefits of the same agreement. I agree with the article but he simply does not account for the infinite amount of possibilities out there, granted self improvement will increase the chances to prove your own worth/ benefits to said people. That's enough self help for the week.