commentary on Essay #2

First off good job on the intro because it drew me in. The summary was very descriptive and it did its job perfectly.  At the end of the summary you asked two questions: "what can we constitute as a torture method? What other method can we use that would be not only a fast and quick method, but also at the most least painful way?". These are good questions but which one is your thesis? Next the paragraph about drowning is very good and puts people in the situation of drowning. The next paragraph is a great continuation of the first and makes for a compelling argument. You seem to be on the right track but you need to add more to the essay. Make it longer and hit about 1200 words (what we have to do basically). Good job so far man.